Um... 'critique'?
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- DoubleKing0
ismith, much much nicer. If you're still making changes, i would consider bringing the "n" in slightly. And the "f" is sitll a bit of a problem. The ascender could be lengthened a little to create more room between it and the "a" - it might also be nice to see what it looks like with a mirrored ending on the bottom, rather than the slab finish.
- I'll try it out later tonight; have real work to do now! ;)ismith
- tank020
nice one,
no remarks on the last posts
- tank020
btw you have already more feeling for typo than 75 percent of the crap that comes in here for a job application
- ismith0
Anyone know where I could find a tiling texture of watercolor paper (a little bit rougher than average stationery) or anything similar? I think it would look nice for a portion of the site.
- univers0
Good Night All!
- ismith0
Okay, it's probably going to be one of these. I'm somewhat partial to the second one– the f descender is supposed to reflect the t instead of the n, although I like the n coming to a halt at the baseline. I decided that making the f taller, while more readable, messed a little too much with the overall tightness of the logo– something I really want to preserve.
- Stick with the "n" in the above sketches the "n" look forced here.utopian
- are you sure u are 16?studderine
- I would kill to be old enough for my driver's license. ;)ismith
- i like the 3rd one the little touch on the t's ascender is nice.studderine
- _salisae_0
it gets really tricky this deep into it b/c you start liking things only because it's different and new. while i think it's an interesting change to the k and t on the 3rd one the original horizontal serif on the k's ascender highlights the cut throughout. if it weren't "faktion" i'd be more open to it. although, i think the beauty of this k is in it's curviness mixed with the hard edges.
i am liking the straight n though it does beg to have it's foot snipped at an angle. but that's probably just from looking at it so much.
i like the second one as well! nice way to tie the f into it more.
- and do double check your birth certificate for the correct year_salisae_
- JerseyRaindog0
Your strike through from o to n looks thicker than the other strike throughs to me? Or am I wrong?
- It's aligned right, it might be distorted a little because I arbitrarily shrink the previews from the working path.ismith
- Point50
stop working on logos and get your ass in World of Warcraft now!
*dons wizard cap and robe, leaves thread
- DoubleKing0
most of these new iterations are decoration. they don't go much further towards solving the problem. good to see the additional work.
as a note, showing them in different colors would be the wrong thing to do. it'll be easier to see the differences in the same palette, stick to black and numbering if necessary - though here top/mid/bottom would be fine. People get seduced by colors and often stop looking critically at the form changes.
On the new, this "n" is fine and works with the original "f". They both need the same feet to complete the mark - so that it's anchored on either end. Your angle on the "f" is actually more distracting because the tilt of the letter forms is moving your eye to the right and the verso on the "f" is countering the read. Again, to my eye, the negative space between the "f" and the "a" is too close. Your earlier higher ascender was in better relationship to the rest of the mark.
great to see you putting so much work into this.
- Isn't that a big part about diplsay face typography? Decoration?univers
- your question seems somewhat rhetorical and not in the spirit of my response. My point was that he seemed to be needlessly diverting on what had been finesse.DoubleKing
- ...diverting from what had been finesse.DoubleKing
- univers0
The "O" in your second "faktion" is a bit loose from the "i" bring it in tighter so that the letters feel all even.
- Thank you, I missed that one.ismith
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Better?ismith
- molo0
i don't think a line is nessesary, the logo is nice without it, it serves no purpose
- _salisae_0
which font is this?
- emukid0
you're 16? wtf?
- univers0
He is F@cking 16 and already working on a portfolio... WTH
- _salisae_0
let's see the portfolio!
- nah; maybe when I get a chance to put something in it I'm really proud of... right now it's mostly student work and other bs.ismith
- other bs. I love your portfolio, btw.ismith
- :) thanks. i look forward to seeing your work some day._salisae_
- you did superdeluxe salisae? wow.studderine