Um... 'critique'?
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- DoubleKing0
most of these new iterations are decoration. they don't go much further towards solving the problem. good to see the additional work.
as a note, showing them in different colors would be the wrong thing to do. it'll be easier to see the differences in the same palette, stick to black and numbering if necessary - though here top/mid/bottom would be fine. People get seduced by colors and often stop looking critically at the form changes.
On the new, this "n" is fine and works with the original "f". They both need the same feet to complete the mark - so that it's anchored on either end. Your angle on the "f" is actually more distracting because the tilt of the letter forms is moving your eye to the right and the verso on the "f" is countering the read. Again, to my eye, the negative space between the "f" and the "a" is too close. Your earlier higher ascender was in better relationship to the rest of the mark.
great to see you putting so much work into this.
- Isn't that a big part about diplsay face typography? Decoration?univers
- your question seems somewhat rhetorical and not in the spirit of my response. My point was that he seemed to be needlessly diverting on what had been finesse.DoubleKing
- ...diverting from what had been finesse.DoubleKing
- Point50
stop working on logos and get your ass in World of Warcraft now!
*dons wizard cap and robe, leaves thread
- JerseyRaindog0
Your strike through from o to n looks thicker than the other strike throughs to me? Or am I wrong?
- It's aligned right, it might be distorted a little because I arbitrarily shrink the previews from the working path.ismith
- _salisae_0
it gets really tricky this deep into it b/c you start liking things only because it's different and new. while i think it's an interesting change to the k and t on the 3rd one the original horizontal serif on the k's ascender highlights the cut throughout. if it weren't "faktion" i'd be more open to it. although, i think the beauty of this k is in it's curviness mixed with the hard edges.
i am liking the straight n though it does beg to have it's foot snipped at an angle. but that's probably just from looking at it so much.
i like the second one as well! nice way to tie the f into it more.
- and do double check your birth certificate for the correct year_salisae_
- ismith0
Okay, it's probably going to be one of these. I'm somewhat partial to the second one– the f descender is supposed to reflect the t instead of the n, although I like the n coming to a halt at the baseline. I decided that making the f taller, while more readable, messed a little too much with the overall tightness of the logo– something I really want to preserve.
- Stick with the "n" in the above sketches the "n" look forced here.utopian
- are you sure u are 16?studderine
- I would kill to be old enough for my driver's license. ;)ismith
- i like the 3rd one the little touch on the t's ascender is nice.studderine
- DoubleKing0
ismith: you'll get a better education at your local library looking up Muller-Brockmann and Jan Tschichold than many undergrads.
btw, i have that type grid book you pointed to earlier, it's not very useful for where you're at.
- forcetwelve0
i cant believe they won't let you do type! its great that you are teaching yourself though. well done. logo looks good to me. save as - now sleep.
- marychain0
Startin to like this young whipper-snapper
#2 is lookin real nice. Like the treatment of the n quite a bit, but I like the higher f in #3
- edd-e0
here is a website about Identity Guidelines.. Perfect for you..
- DoubleKing0
welcome to the wonderful hell of identity design.
- utopian0
ISMITH: here is a cool site on one of the godfathers of typography and design Josef Müller-Brockmann. Since they will not teach you typography at school we will.
- utopian0
#3 does it for me, nice... now go to bed and get some sleep
- utopian0
Your revised logo looks really nice.
Title backgrounds:
http://www.k10k.net/pixelpattern…
http://squidfingers.com/patterns…
- _salisae_0
red one is great. the raised ascender knocks it off balance. good work fully flushing it out.
- DoubleKing0
agree with evanburke. I'd like to see a mix of 2 and 3. The higher "f" is working well. I like the abrupt ending for the "n" since it's a wordmark and not text - however, i'd like to see it end on line.
With that, i think you're done.
- evanburke0
While I like what you've done with the "n" on the 2nd example, I think it hurts your readability too much.
- tank020
btw you have already more feeling for typo than 75 percent of the crap that comes in here for a job application