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- moth
http://www.mauva.co.uk/_test4.ph…
'Bout time this made an outing.
Two sites aren't yet live.
Need to add contact details.
Images are random, if there is more than 1 per job.Suggestions/comments would be welcome.
In particular, I'm struggling with copy, and the whole I/we thing. Some sites involve more than just me, others are all me.
This is a website for my services, not a portfolio.
- blaw0
when the background images tile in a matched way it looks really good.
'specialten' looks like it should match up, but doesn't.
the photos obviously won't match up, which i'm luke-warm about.
the white text on gray doesn't really encourage me to read the description associated with the project.
i'd say stick with the pronoun "we" for the copywriting.
- moth0
thanks blaw.
the photos, the only other option is bigger images, but big download times.
I'll try and make specialten tile.
- jamble0
I think you're going to need a bigger text area for copy when using strong images, I found it difficult to read the project info as it is at the moment. I'd personally try more padding around the copy. Don't know how it would look but might be less strain on my eyes.
- Chimp0
Erm, colours are a bit 2003. The nav gets a little lost some times. The project description is quite hard to read in one long line.
- moth0
2003 chimp?
*digs out 2006 Hex Swatch book
- myobie0
use we
the grey background needs to be darker or something, hard to read
it's a nice idea
- moth0
ok.
I'll do something with the description box.
Thanks all.
- Baskerville0
I agree, I had to strain pretty hard to read the whilte captions on the grey background. May be because of interference from the busy images behind. I'd suggest more contrast, so darker grey or darker text.
the long buttons are a bit epileptic when scrolling over them, do they need to be that wide?
- Chimp0
2003 chimp?
*digs out 2006 Hex Swatch book
moth
(Oct 24 06, 07:24)Man, anyone who was anyone was wearing blue and pink back in the heady days of 03.
- moth0
http://www.mauva.co.uk/_test4.ph…
Are these colours too nuts?
I've been looking so long they look nicely terrible...
- Nairn0
Bit heavy on the eyes, man.
'This is a website for my services, not a portfolio.' - if you're struggling with copy, how about plainly listing what you've done? At the moment you've only got a single line description, which is a bit worthless from a prospective client's POV.
Whilst I can see where you're coming from with the lo-tech feel - would a client? Or would they just see curiously hued html text and a big tiled image? What value would they see in that for their own needs?
x
- myobie0
the text is a bit easier to read, i would suggest a bit more contrast tho
maybe a test size just a bit larger would help
also, there needs to be a longer description of what you actually did or make the view site link really stand out...you want them to goto the sites and it's easy to miss the view site link
- moth0
don't fall off your bike, Nairn.
;)
Maybe I should just start over.
- momento0
the I/We thing. I used to use the royal 'we' but have since decided that honesty is the best policy and wherever other people deserve a credit - they get one.
- UndoUndo0
moth i prefer the last incarnation with the showhide JS. it was much clearer.
I would also suggest talking about what your involvement was in the project and the skills/services that were used to reach the outcome and the brief/intent from the client
- moth0
*bump
http://www.mauva.co.uk/_test4.ph…I wonder. Do you think I'm any closer?