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- rabattski0
lose the bottle and the glass asap. really. and integrate the a,b and e more into a typographic table. already like how it looks (xcept the bottle and glass) and which direction it's going.
- Dancer0
The idea should work fine but it needs a few tweeks.
I think you have pushed it too far in general. It almost looks forced, the type is very cramped. Loose the glass and bottle, it adds nothing.
Bring it back a few steps and first a start by looking at the type. The font is fine just the positioning.
Am I rambling....?
Keep going but go back a bit :/
good start
- blaw0
cool idea, gruntt.
the "a, b, e" are too close to the top.
when that is reduced you'll lose the space separating them completely.
- rasko40
sorry dude but it looks cheap.
visual puns like that are the preserve of the 1970's. and not in a good way.
- gruntt0
i felt the bottle and glass balanced out the "e" - is it truly hated?
good point on the tightness of the type. it actually reduces surprisingly well but it could use some space.
a visual pun for a restaurant works for me for some reason. i wouldn't go that route for any other client.
thanks gang. keep 'em coming.
- tGP0
yeah... i think playing with the spacing of the characters a bit, and losing the tabe top items would strengthen it, use the "t" and the "l" in a more subtle way ...
but good good start...
cheers.
j
- rasko40
maybe you can make the lines thinner and adjust the type slightly to make it more deco? it just looks a bit poorly crafted for me at this stage.
- gruntt0
do you think it needs more cow bell?
=)
- rasko40
"mmm, I just think it needs, like err more WOW factor, we need more POP"
- gruntt0
i think i know what you're saying rasko... it needs to be more Sexy...& Designy, right?
lol.
- rasko40
thats it, we are basically looking for more "UUMPH!"
;)
- radar0
I agree with losing the glass and bottle. I would also try to lower the "able" just a bit and shorten the legs up to help bring it all together. Good start.
- gruntt0
thanks everyone (so far)
this is a freelance project so i'll tighten it up tonight after work.
more feedback welcome
- fifty500
as my old boss would say "it needs to be 'punchy'"
lol
j/k man, less punch, more flare.
- stewart0
is it only me or what?
the first time i read JabLe and after a splitsecond in the re-scan it is "TabLe".and keep the bottle in it, but add another glass. because you can go there with your chick too right.
- DragKng0
what they all said, my gut was.. lose the bottle...
and... more COW BELL, for sure
- greg0
As the image was loading I imagined the word table made into a table. you didn't surprise me. what does this say about the restraunt? that they're "clever" ?
back to the drawing board.. do many more .
- stewart0
don't loose the bottle!
- gruntt0
greg - you misspelled restaurant... or were you just being clever?
j/k =)
- dippy0
I agree with stewart. I like the bottle, but the glass will give you scaling problems because of the narrow stem.
Without the bottle on top, it doesn't really look like a table.