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- dconstrukt
hey guys....i posted something before about business card critique.
i'm workin on my minibook. i think i just about have the design set up.
BUT
i'm still unsure about the layout on the pages where the work is displayed. I'm not sure the best way to lay that page out.....perhaps someone could have a lookie and give me some pointers.
i need to get a good job asap.
yikes.
http://www.ultimatemarketingmini…
thanks
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- Duane0
looks good - i liked your cards the other day too (and your site). here are my thoughts...feel free to ignore.
will the red on the back bleed through to the front? may be something to think about.
i think the application of your logo on the intro page could be much smaller and maybe tucked in a corner like on your bcard. in fact, maybe all pages have your logo on them in a corner. are these double-sided? if so, maybe the intro should be single sided.
i think you could keep titles large and drop descriptions down to a much smaller type size to aid in legibility and to create more of a heirarchy of information. besides, the contrast in type sizes makes it more interesting. maybe descriptions are mixed case instead of alll upper as well.
on the logo sample page, i think the mark should be smaller (1.5" or 1.75") and maybe right aligned with the cards.
on the description of the in house logo there is a widow. i realize this is just a comp but you'll want to fix that.
- Dr_Jay0
Hopefully this won't sound too harsh...
The typography is all over the place... If you have more than a paragraph of copy to read, I'd recommend losing the all-caps minimal leading layout. It can be stylish if it's just a bit of type, but trying to read a few lines of it is just annoying.
Maybe try contrasting the bold ko all-cap type with something a bit more subtle... it would also help to visually differentiate between different elements.
About the business card: from the small image of it, I think the design is lovely...
BUT... good luck getting a printer to hold your 1 pt red bleed... it just won't happen. tolerances look a bit too tight (maybe you're gonna trim them by hand?)
also... your copy is really bad... it doesn't make you sound like a professional at all (spell check it, too).
anyway... hopefully this helps
- MrDinky0
damn looks good.. i think i am gonna rip it
- piperboytoy0
hey nice biz cards! really like them. probably better than your mini book layout.
you need to spend more time with the type treatment of your book. I think you can shrink the font size and use the space better. Right now it's smack in the center, and it doesn't make it interesting to look at. Your other layout has some use of negative space.
Otherwise your work is pretty solid. Good luck on your job search.!
- Dr_Jay0
testpilot... lol... great minds think alike...
- dconstrukt0
guys thank you SO much. i just wasnt sure how my style of design would match up in the real world. or if i was good enough
i'll work hard on the type. really hard. i want to to be really good.
on the description page, i was thinking to make the info part smaller.
for the second page i wanted to keep the type large and "smushed" together, kinda staying with the whole feel of it.
maybe its not a good idea.
keep the comments comin....
- piperboytoy0
you'll do fine! I love orange!
- MrDinky0
Piper.. i sent you an email.. help me
- unknown0
you have some rwally bad typos in there for starters.
- dconstrukt0
piper.....whats the orange thing?
again.
lol
workinon the stuff.......andif the printer cant do the cards right, i'm gonna body slam the fucker off the roof....LOL
- dconstrukt0
rasko i know about the typos....i was justtyping fast.....and just put in whatever until i finish writing the content and SPELL CHECKING the fucker.
this was just a quickie comp.
thanks for the help though....i NEED to be more careful.
- unknown0
as for the typog, I think its one way or the other - either bunch it roght up so thewre is no space inbetween or give it some space - I'd prefer the latter which wil probably affect whether you choose to use all caps or not, I know the loook you're after but sometimes it just wont work with body copy that you actually need people to read.
The other thing is just back to copy, I guess you haven't looked at this and its just dummy copy but definately get the right tone and dont have typos.
Should be a good result though, it has definate promise!
- Dr_Jay0
"andif the printer cant do the cards right, i'm gonna body slam the fucker off the roof...."
be prepared to slam...
- unknown0
hahaha - I am now the King of typos with that last post!
- piperboytoy0
send it again Dinky! I changed my email to
Is it urgent?
- unknown0
good good good. I like.
but,
I don't like to read design theories. Just me. Show me, don't preach to me. Less text.".. my designs are cool" ? AND I think they are. But don't tell me. Sounds too much like "I'm still in school".
keep up the good work.
- Rementera0
the type is indecisive. make sure you spell things correct, and nobody really cares about your 'passion'
- dconstrukt0
Rementera:
thanks for the comments, although I must disagree with you. Its a minibook selling ME.
I'd think someone reading it would want to know something about me.
Glad I'm not showing you my book....
- dconstrukt0
I've redesigned the description page .....so all the description pages would look like this.
opinions?
http://www.ultimatemarketingmini…
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- liquid0
are the pages going to bleed? if so, where are you going to get your short run printed at and how much does it cost?