Crit. 2
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- Epictive
http://www.visitmarshallislands.…
Ok, I asked you guys for a crit a while back on this, and all of you were real nice, and encouraging. Now its time for a fine toothed comb. The site is almost done, and commercials are going to start airing nationally for it soon, so I want it to look all pretty. Please any suggestions, mistakes, or pats on the back will be very helpful. Thanks all.
-A
- mayo0
This is kinda long and nit-picky in some cases, but i hope it helps :)
INFO section
take out the extra space after "US," in Political Status
I hate widows (personal preference) maybe bring "Mean" down in "Time zone" or at least follow "Time" with (GMT)
Take out the comma after "and in
"Credit Cards"
Add a comma after "cool" in "Dress"
ATTRACTIONS Section
take out comma after "channels"
and after "sharks" in Mili
in Likiep, add an s to "mean" and take out the comma after "culture"
ACCOMMODATIONS
take out the comma before "and" in the last 3 hotels
GETTING THERE
take out comma in second paragraph
- kpl0
I seriously, seriously think you need more copy there. As is, you're not selling the marshall islands, it works more like an encyclopedia article. I think there needs to be something there that differentiates the Marshalls from any other tropical island, and that info needs to be up-front and center. It shouldn't be hidden two clicks away in the about or attractions section.
- undo0
hi mayo,
under 'getting there' > the 3rd link at the bottom is using arial (i think) whilst the other 2 are using a pixel font.
following is just personal opinion:
i feel that the top navigational buttons are typographically weak. whilst you've made it very clear that they are 'main' buttons to be pressed, perhaps the pixel font you've used is lacking in strength. (it almost feels like a monospaced verdana)
you've created a nice sharp and crisp feel about this site, though i am always quick to associate pixel fonts with personal designer sites. perhaps using a nice sans for the main buttons would give it a more corporate edge.
best of luck
- mayo0
hi undo
not my site/work :)
- undo0
another quickie,
i think the sub-buttons which lie on the left of the content frame (example: under 'attractions' > sportsfishing, diving & snorkelling....) should be left aligned rather than centre.
attractions > 'other attractions' looks like it's been kerned a little oddly.
ONCE again, my 2c :)
- undo0
mayo: ok :) i just kinda saw 'crit' and went a little nuts.
- neeko0
I think it looks really good man. The more information the better, but im assuming youre working with what they gave you... and i didnt really find it that deprived of copy.
The text on the header looked awkward to me... thats as nitpicky as i can get. maybe i'll look at it again when im in a pissier mood.
- neeko0
secondary navigation links dont exactly jump out at you i guess...
- Epictive0
Thanks guys, the little mistakes that you guy mentioned are now fixed, thinking about the other suggestions. The content is the client's choice, can’t really do anything about it, Ill still pass those suggestions on. Please keep them coming, love your suggestions. Thanks.
-A