Student portfolio critique
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- bananaman0
Great stuff, loving the print job for the game.
- d_rek0
I would disagree with kaonashi here... it shows excellent ability to apply related imagery and rhetorical design elements across multiple applications, both screen and print. I hope he is joking.
Some issues with grammer, the danske reklame has a broken image/weird display issue (not sure which).
Outside of that your portfolio is excellent! Keep it up.
- Nutter0
Thanks for all the comments and encouraging words.
Jamal_Jenkins - Sometimes some images doesn't load as they should, I've been looking into this but haven't found a reason why yet. Refresh and they should appear.
baseline_shift - I think you're right about the menu, I'll try adding some kind of divider to make the different projects more clear.
harmsie - I wanted the text not to be too slick and show a little bit of personality as the actual design isn't very personal. Not sure if it works as intended though. You're right about the "The Vault" so I think I'll rename it to "Archive", hopefully that should make it more clear.
Thanks for all the comments, its really helpful. Just a quick question: is it clear enough that you can click the different images to view the next, or does that need to be more clear?
- I didnt notice that you could click for the next image. But the scrolling worked just fine, so i didnt need to.baseline_shift
- Iggyboo0
Jolly Cola is a fucking brilliant project You need to send that to a couple companies and sell it that shit would be perfectly marketable.
- kaonashi0
I'm not sure what's so "brilliant" about it? He just retraced the old logo. For the packaging, he's taken what Heinz and Molson's have been doing for a few years now.
Nothing original or "brilliant" about it.
- dude, student work. relax. he has a pretty nice folio.baseline_shift
- Its not his mark? That changes things. I thought this was non existing creative.Iggyboo
- not as I wrote its based on their old logo. You can see it here : http://farm3.static.…Nutter
- Jamal_Jenkins0
solid work, you do have some missing or broken links.
- skt0
your css is failing to load on ff on xp.
- baseline_shift0
overall, pretty nice work. Agree with some of the above comments about grammar.
I would reconsider the way the sub-navigation for the 'work' section is organized. The different job titles seem to run together into an awkward sentence. Maybe try putting a little one of your redcell marks between each as a visual divider.
- skt0
the jolly cola work is lovely though.
- baseline_shift0
'CV Stuff: All the boring info thats only usefull for employers or stalkers... in case you are a stalker please don’t look at it, unless you’re an unusually hot stalker, then by all means please do.'
This made me chuckle.
- I would take that out. what if a woman is involved in hiring you? likely will look at that dimly.....twokids
- d_rek0
kaonashi,
Not sure why you're being such a hater. Lets see your work, student, professional or otherwise... oh wait... just a link to some website with other peoples shit. Hmmmm.
- coco_ono0
i'm stalking you. *reads your CV*
- coco_ono0
is it really necessary to include your date of birth on your CV?
- kaonashi0
d_rek, when I'm right, I'm right.
- skt0
oh, your going to be popular.
- Iggyboo0
Wait Kaonashi brings up a good point but I dont think he did retrace an old logo it looks like he redid one...
http://www.flickr.com/photos/haw… this looks like a totally different mark. And frankly if he did the swooshy logo the new one on his own.. it shows three things.. One he's aware of logo trends, two he's aware of good marketing because that advertisement on the bottle system is cool, and three he's pretty much brought back an older brand which is something beer companies have been doing forever and I am suprised its taken so long to happen in the cola market.
Props sell the concept at least try too its sweet.
- kaonashi0
Get rid of the "Multiwinia' project. It hurts your portfolio to have it in there.
"The Vault" stuff probably doesn't belong in there either.
- kaonashi0
Get rid of the "Multiwinia' project. It hurts your portfolio to have it in there.
"The Vault" stuff probably doesn't belong in there either.
- harmsie0
Nice work good site.
I would look at the subnavigation though, The vault should appear on a separate line or in separate space to show its an archive, looks too much like a single project.
And while I am the last person lecture anyone about this, I don't think the tone of copy suits the slickness of the site. I like the tone of it but I don't think it suits this design.
Again though overall really nice, happy intern hunting.