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- eficks
http://www.ephix.net/filedump/or…
Ad for symphony orchestra booklet. Can't be product orientated, just showing support. We are a sponsor. Anyway, need to kind of include orchestra, and what we do too.
Any other ideas? I had a violin with a plane cut out of it instead of the air hole. Didn't really work.
Cheers,
- -kappa-0
How about a plane full of the orchestra, instuments and all.
Thats would be a great shoot to organise...
- Goozebump0
dude more color its to somber give it some life then it;ll be good.
- eficks0
Yes that would be great, but that would cost lots. Somehow I don't think this ad could justify it.
- visualplane0
I'd like to see it a bit more abstrakt. Nice idea.
- eficks0
goozebump, its 1 colour print at 150dpi.
- agentfour0
why is there and infinity symbol between the notes? I cant remember that being used in music notation......maybe thats cos i sucked tho.
Definately needs some contrast or colour.
How bout you get some sheet music, fold it itno a paper plane, then take a photo?
just an idea.
- eficks0
no, thats a good idea, I wonder where my brain is today.
- agentfour0
PATENT!
that'll be $20'000
hehe.
:)
- eficks0
new version with new photo just taken:
- brains0
that one looks alot better, I don't know about the jetstream/motionblurred streaks.. Looking good though.
- agentfour0
cule!
u should make the notes flying off the paper into the jetstream and in black.
or is it grey your using for the 2 colour print?
- sajets_v20
If it's 1 colour print then why not make it Blue? Blue with white notes/jetstream/plane would look very nice IMO And it would give life to your idea.
Just a thought.
- spongebob0
pretty common.
works though.
- Engage_London0
don't think you need the notes on the trails... the sheet music is enough
- mase0
Some thoughts if you'll have em...
Your jetstream notes look more like some sort of ancient script than they do notes - they're too formal I think because they're on the same line.
Get yer proper sheet music notes coming off the paper airplane ledger lines, treble cleffs n all.
If it's limited colours you need to use a full tonal range, it's all a bit middle grey - get some contrast!!!
looks like a good project to work on!
- eficks0
Actually it's black only, not a colour I can choose. And yes I will definately put some more work into making the notes look better, It's just a rough draft mock-up for the idea. Thanks all, will resume work on it on Thursday.
- eficks0
oh yeah there was a 3rd version of it with less notes and chaos, looks a bit better. forgot to upload it though.
- stewart0
music notes are always black. how can they become white when they fall off the paper?
- eficks0
they are apple music notes
- eficks0
http://www.ephix.net/filedump/or…
Theres the dark notes one, but I don't like it. Will do a rehaul of it when I go back to work.